Witches Magic Spells

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem closely mirrors the witches' chant from Shakespeare's "Macbeth," particularly the famous "Double, double toil and trouble" passage. While literary references can enrich poetry, it is important to clearly signal the intention behind incorporating such direct allusions. The poem currently does not offer a fresh perspective or reinterpretation of the original material, making it difficult to discern the poet's unique voice or purpose.

Additionally, there are some spelling and punctuation inconsistencies that detract from the reading experience. For instance, "tounge" should be "tongue," "tail and trouble" appears to be a misquotation of "toil and trouble," and the punctuation around "Hell--broth" and "Double, Double" seems inconsistent or unclear.

To strengthen this poem, consider clarifying the intention behind referencing Shakespeare's original text. Is the goal to parody, reinterpret, or pay homage? Clearly defining this intention will help guide revisions. Also, careful proofreading and editing for spelling and punctuation accuracy will improve readability and coherence.

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What a wonderful temptation to young inquiring minds, Mary.
This is where it begins, an interest in poetry, literature in general.

(Ignore ol' "Iron arse"" above.

Obi.

like a potent spell to me! ~ Geezer.
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COMMENTS PLEASE. here you go Mary.

I really enjoyed the atmosphere you’ve created, definitely a nod to Macbeth, and you’ve captured that dark, magical tone nicely. That said, I think the piece would benefit from a clearer sense of purpose. As it stands, it feels a little unfinished, which risks losing the reader’s engagement. Perhaps one more verse to show where the spell is heading or to bring it to a satisfying close? Overall, a great draft with vivid imagery, lots of potential here.

As I've said before, if you make your changes on here, in your poem, it may spark more engagement with others :) Ruby xx