Death of A Sister

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Consider clarifying the emotional complexity of the relationship with the sister. Currently, the poem primarily expresses regret and sadness, but it could benefit from more specific imagery or concrete details about the sister's life or personality. Lines such as "A sister plagued from the day she was born" and "Filled with pain and suffering that we mourn" are quite general; consider providing more vivid examples or memories to deepen the reader's understanding of her struggles and character. Additionally, the rhyme scheme and rhythm are consistent, but at times the rhyme feels forced (e.g., "aide" and "made"). Revising these lines to feel more natural could strengthen the poem's emotional impact. Lastly, the final couplet referencing the Rosary is powerful, but it might benefit from additional context or imagery that connects more directly to the sister's personal experience or the family's relationship with faith.

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reading this, I was struck by the thought; that it marched straight-ahead across the page, as though, it was a report that was given without much emotion, maybe just as duty. I suspect that having been sick a long time, and in suffering; that this would be a relief as was alluded to, in lines eight through ten. However, you feel about her death, I wish you peace with it.
I still don't know how to feel about this, only to say that I was touched. ~ Geez.
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It is my fervent hope that she finally found peace after such a formidable battle.

major hugs, Cat xxx

For your loss. May she have found peace on the other side.

Such a sad circumstance! My sympathies are with you.