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Jan 04, 2026
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Easy Target
With her suspicious heart for ammunition,
one inevitable wrong move by me
and I was going to be done for.
Pretty soon, I stopped
trying to avoid her aim.
She had already put holes
where we needed to breathe.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Rula
3 months 2 weeks ago
Michael
I don't claim getting the message here and I would very much
apprciate a help.
Michael Anthony
3 months 2 weeks ago
Thanks for stopping by, Rula…
Thanks for stopping by, Rula! This is a piece about a failed love, with the cause being a very untrusting heart (for no reason I gave her). I gave up on the relationship because some damage cannot be repaired. Definitely going for a Bukowski-ish vibe, one of my major influences - cheers!
Rula
3 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you for the clarification
reading this again, it makes much sense. So, this was a true story? I definitely believe you did the best. Some damages absolutely can't be repaired.
Thank you again for sharing.
Michael Anthony
3 months 2 weeks ago
True story, Rula.
True story, Rula.
Lavender
3 months 2 weeks ago
Easy Target
Hello, Michael,
Nice title. The final line is moving - ironically, the poem gives the feeling of suffocating...
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
3 months 2 weeks ago
Suffocating is the best way…
Suffocating is the best way to describe it, L. Thanks for stopping by!