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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem explores the longing for emotional support and companionship, focusing on the desire for someone who responds to hardship with positivity and care. The structure is spare, with short lines that create a sense of vulnerability and directness. This minimalism can be effective for conveying raw emotion, but it also risks leaving the reader wanting more specificity or imagery.

The poem’s diction is simple and conversational, which makes the sentiment accessible but occasionally leads to ambiguity. For example, the line “If that was ever / like that” is somewhat unclear in its reference—clarifying what “that” refers to could strengthen the emotional impact. The repeated use of “someone who choose” introduces a grammatical inconsistency; “chooses” would be standard, and maintaining consistent tense and agreement could make the poem feel more polished.

The poem relies on abstract concepts such as “care,” “loving heart,” and “difficulties,” without grounding these ideas in concrete images or experiences. Incorporating sensory details or specific scenarios could help the reader connect more deeply with the speaker’s longing. The contrast between “laugh / with you / instead crying about it / in bed” is effective in illustrating the desired response to hardship, but the transition could be clarified—perhaps by more explicitly juxtaposing the two responses.

Overall, the poem communicates a universal desire for empathetic companionship but would benefit from greater specificity, grammatical consistency, and clearer imagery to fully engage the reader.

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Just two mistakes.

The first one is of syntax : When using the word  [choose] in the past tense, it is spelled [chose].

The second, I would write the line: "If that was ever like that", like this instead.

If [it] was ever like that.

The poem is real, the emotion is felt, simple mistakes that one might make. ~ Geezer.

I think that you may also go with what the AI says about using chooses if you are speaking in the present tense. ~ Geezer