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barbsdad2003
Jun 13, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

ms. woodchuck


I follow skunk and possum
for to eat their chosen blossom;
 
and if should happen by---
oh, gosh! oh, gosh! oh, my!---
 
by my good luck
fat ms. woodchuck,
 
I then stalk her for such foods she’ll find
‘cause it’s my plump health I keep in mind

— barbsdad2003, Jun 13, 2007

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Conect11

19 years ago

I wonder

after reading this I wonder whose point of view it's written from? Mrs. Woodchuck's? Your language use is clever, maybe even a bit coy. I especially like the final stanza, it works for me. My only complaint is your punctuation.
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barbsdad2003

19 years ago

punctuation in mrs. woodchuck

Thanx for your insight. I would appreciate, though, a further comment from you as to what you recommend re punctuation. I did just now do an edit, altho I don't know what it is you are looking for in that regard. Thanx. Your comment appreciated and noted. Incidentally, I've been trying to write poetry for less than a year now, and evidently it shows at least to some extent. Another incidentally: I'm diabetic, with a wild mama woodchuck living in my backyard; and so far she's chosen safe wild foods for me--for which I'm eternally grateful.
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Conect11

18 years 12 months ago

punctuation

hmmm, maybe I was seeing things, because the only thing I see now was you appear to need a period at the very end of the poem. God Bless, Mark

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