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Prisoner

Shadow that lingers about,
darkness that never shows through.

Prisoner in the depths of my soul
wishing I had a way out.
 
Shadow that I cannot see,
darkness that turned into me.

Prisoner I never wanted to be,
needing, wanting,
to be set free.

— Mistyone, Jun 14, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 12 months ago

I am reading your poetry backwards

8) I mean I am reading the most recent postings back to the first. Probably not the way you'ld like it but that is one of the scary things about poetry, as i said before, you can't control your readers. This one touched me in a place I used to be. You definitely have the makings of a true poet, concise and powerful use of language, honesty and depth of feeling. But only yourself with the help of many people can set you free. Otherwise abandon intellect and integrity and turn to religion or get sick and turn to love addiction. This is a victim poem, but I trust from the strength and integrity of your work so far you won't remain a victim, cheers Jess

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