lost cheer

so sweet she was,

the little girl

with golden curl—

and fidgin fain

on divinin’ soon,

on that very day,

a bit of sunny play …

she shortly lost

her cheer,

I fear,

on account

of dogged rain

— barbsdad2003, Jun 26, 2007

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Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

You make me smile

and you inspire me. One thing about this one, the Concise Oxford having let me down I resorted to google and got a definition of fidgin fain as randy, horny. I wonder if I should leave google alone when I read your works and when in doubt, just let the lyric of the word come out, cheers, Jess

barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

What?!

My dictionary has fidgin fain as curious, excited. I think I smell at least a subtle difference in our two sources. Regards, Chuckles

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

will definitely let the lyric of the words come out

Can not afford, no do truly trust, the Complete Websters. Would never place google against Oxford or Websters, yes I detect the smell. cheers, Jess

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