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A MASTER AND A LITTLE BOY

A Master And A Little Boy

He is the master of forty kids
taking lessons with a smile
his face seems to be a velvette rose
his smile is a magnet to attract the kids
no weeping and no crying with him
a loud noise out of glee is there
he forgets every thing with them
that garden is a place of heaven to him
a small boy came to his eyes
with full of fear and sorrow to release
he welcommed and take his burden
the little boy has his glee and
the master lost his smile and peace
he prayed the lord to have all sorows
and asked him to change their pains

Sakthi Ravi Chandran

AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET

— SAKTHEEE2007, Jul 09, 2007

Critiques

LC

Lis Cassé

18 years 11 months ago

Moving

This piece if very moving and beautiful. It is a bit hard to read they way it is written, but the content is wonderful. I love the lines: "the little boy has his glee and the master lost his smile and peace" It is often the hope to take the burden from the young and put it on the old. I like this piece.

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