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barbsdad2003
Jul 12, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

On Severy Dranes

Befud the timbers

To offiss gimbers.

 

Sins wend descry the wolf

Offiss moon-cal both.

 

Tranes do cranes

On severy dranes

 

To glim-replace

Every race dan savor face.

— barbsdad2003, Jul 12, 2007

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barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

Hey, Jess!

It's just shades of Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky. He's my inspiration here. I've tried it before and was unhappy with the result. This attempt I liked. Similar to much of modern art, meaning can be ascribed to this piece if you look hard enough. Or if you don't look for it at all ... and it comes to visit you with a touch anyway, like a butterfly kissing a flower, somewhere on an emotional plane. Regards, Chuck

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