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Forbidden Lovers

Legs crossed..

In the dark…

Curved body arched…

I wish I could say no,

but in the midst somewhere between lust and passion,

I’m lost and I can’t let you go.

 

Bare chest…

Hands tightly clutch…

As roaming fingers linger…

I want you to stop,

but my body betrays me,

as I boldly climb on top.

 

Ripped skirt…

Legs locked…

Fighting for control…

Your trying to be sweet,

but in truth thats not want I want.

Despite myself I still cling to you… so make it rough.

 

— Alijandra, Jul 17, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

You are a brave, beautiful, accomplished poet

I never read people profiles till I have read their poetry, which I duly did, intrigued. Love your quote "It is not enough to conquer... one must know how to suduce!" (sic. seduce) I rather think you must be a published poet mucking it down here for some gritty feedback on new stuff. Whether or not, most welcome, and would welcome your feedback. cheers, Jess
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kinganeye

18 years 11 months ago

Mama Mia

I like it its raw, Its strong with physical intent. Its realistic about the need to hold back, but the reckless sense that drives you forward. And a need to belong that might not be there. The security in familairty. John
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Not Anymore

An itty-bitty edit (or two or three) would be helpful here. Otherwise, a well-done piece. I used to like mine rare, but not anymore. Regards, Chuck

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