Words I Hate

I hate the word profundity it is so damn… profound. I hate intelligencia and their interest in my town. I can’t stand the word obscure, because I have to search for its true meaning. Not really a fan of the word feeling, either. Because out of context it doesn’t mean much, as such, it bothers me to no end. And then I say again to all my close friends: Really I could do without excersize, and deitise, jazzercise, and gold. Sparkling, I’m not fond of. Love I never saw, but it should definately have a warning label attached to it, shit, take a hit, and split I hate them all Paul, the man who picked a gall - gotha - tomb with a view room with a noose, a moose! I’ve another lame excuse! I was young and thin in another life and dated a masseuse. But the only thing we had in common was alcohol abuse. Now I’ll admit (you’ll have a fit, so sit) that I hate rhyme when rhyme is all the time. A brutal crime, I hate the line "It’s another bad dream" see?

— Conect11, Jul 21, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

first comment

just a personal thing. I am starting to hate centred verse. It strikes me as pretentious and hallmarky. Unless there is a visual meaning in the shape of the work. Which is clearly not the case here. Beyond that I also cannot tolerate the use of the words reality, purity and another which I can't remember right now. In short I love it. you cunning bastard. cheers, Jess

Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

lol, thanks!

I have to admit I am completely apathetic to where on the page a poem is, though I can say that when I was less experienced I centered my poems more. I meant to write this the other day, but put it off. Then I saw Kim's comment to harley lady and was like "gotta write that poem!" So, thanks, Kim!

Quillsvein1

18 years 10 months ago

Exxcellent

Despite all my formative years of attempting centred poetry and wasting a great deal of time exercising mediocre poems for a purpose that Microsoft Word could have served much better with one click, I can still take quite a bit from this poem. Your plays on language are also exuberant and free as always. Great job

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Okay....now what did I do?

I like the poem but don't see how it fits into the comment I left. Now you have me befuddled, bemused and perplexed. Let's not forget puzzled, mystified and bewildered. :p. and in my bid to read it's now I must concede to smarter those than I just smacked me in my eye. I think. lol! p.s. I like to center my poems and do it on purpose. I write almost all of my poems to be centered. In no particular shape. You guys can be quirky sometimes. K. Mulroney

Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

lol!

Did not mean to perplex! I had intended to write this a few days before. On Friday I read a comment from you to working Harley Lady where you told her she used a particular word too many times. You then told her some "poetry death words." I was like "oh, I need to write my poem!" So there ya have it :) Mark

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

I got it

I was yanking and banking the perpetual chain. Just in a weird mood today is all. I still liked the poem. And I think I called them "poetry fall words" but no matter. Keep em coming! K. Mulroney

poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

Job well done

The title suited the poem very well,the words were well used in my opinion. The pace was quick and flowing, I got a feel of the hate in the words and why, I liked the whole poem and the logic! A job well done!! ( yea its easier to do it in word thats what I had to do because a lot of my poems were centered... personally it doesn't bother me)

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