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barbsdad2003
Jul 23, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

America

 

God bless America,
Home of the brave and free …

And of a governmental
Bureaucracy

That does not give a damn
About dear you or me,

And that casts quite far and wide
Environmentally

The pronounced effects of
Toxic nuclear debris.

(See my poem Arlington and its following comments for background on this piece.)
— barbsdad2003, Jul 23, 2007

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Country/Region: USA

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Quillsvein1

18 years 10 months ago

Indeed

You have a quiet fury here. One wouldn't expect it to fit in with your particularly restrained, formal style of writing, but it actually works quite a bit more effectively. God Bless a country where even veterans of WWII and Vietnam are getting docked on their benefits and more young men come home poor and injured for a senseless war. Well done.
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Quillsvein1

18 years 10 months ago

Indeed

You have a quiet fury here. One wouldn't expect it to fit in with your particularly restrained, formal style of writing, but it actually works quite a bit more effectively. God Bless a country where even veterans of WWII and Vietnam are getting docked on their benefits and more young men come home poor and injured for a senseless war. Well done.
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poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

Perfect Wording

You got it all right with just those few words. This poem is short to the point, and the words read loud. I love it!

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