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WW1: A Desert Heart

A mother’s heart

skips a beat

 

A son’s dishonesty,

true age wrong.

 

His war ship has

come in.

 

Will he board

will he won’t.

 

Lied to his mother

Lied to his friends.

 

Where is his father?

AT WAR!!!

— Fleur MacDonald, Jul 28, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

simply and ghastly expressed

the deathly cycle. Powerful. A small suggestion. I feel the last line doesn't need caps and exclamation marks. I'd even consider understating it for effect at war cheers, Jess

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