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barbsdad2003
Jul 28, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

An Organ Ripe

 

The accident, so bad,

Was very, very sad.

 

They were then transporting

At cost exorbitant,

 

By contracted covenant,

 

An organ ripe for transplant

To a liver patient

 

(A note irrelevant).

 

The piano would have

Come quite sometime later

 

Via ocean freighter.

— barbsdad2003, Jul 28, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I may well be mistaken

as often, but I sense a deep personal tragedy here. If I am not wrong, perhaps it was a time to shoot from the hip. cheers, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

p.s.

I don't actually know what "shoot from the hip" means. Something to do with making a strong response without asking questions? cheers, Jess
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Re Organ and Piano

I spent my childhood in churches. Where there was a church organ, there was always a church piano that accompanied. My mother specialized in piano, my father in organ, and they dueted infrequently. So for someone who's used to seeing a piano with an organ, it now seemed ripe to play with both. Yours, Chuck
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

you

always astonish me with your whimsy, I am perpetually in awe. Your contrast between the musical instrument and human organ and the timeliness of each's arrival. Nice. Mark

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