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STILL IAM WAITTING

STILL  I AM  WAITING
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I was waiting  from the school
 for my lessons and for my teachers
I was waiting to get a good job and
 to marry a girl to my life
i was waiting in a nursing home
 to see the new face of my son
I was waiting to admit my son in a school
 to make him as a fittest to survive in this world
I was waiting to have a nice daughter in law
 to look after my son’s needs
I was waiting to my retirement from my work
to relax myself  in melting in hymns
Still i am waiting  to put an end to my life
 to forget everything in the hands of death

SAKTHIRAVICHANDRAN   AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET

— SAKTHEEE2007, Jul 31, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

eeeew, nasty

this is so at odds with your normal joyful ebullience I wonder if I am missing the irony, or were you just depressed? cheers, Jess

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