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MY FIRST POEM

  She is my first poem

I read her to enjoy the life

Her beauty is the metaphor  of the nature

I mingled in it to reach the peak of lust

Her talks are rhythm

I memorised them to recreate my desires

Herface is beauty pool

I dwelled in it to refresh my thoughts

My collection starts from her

and will end only with her..

 

SAKTHIRAVICHANDRAN

— SAKTHEEE2007, Aug 20, 2007

Critiques

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purplemoondoll

18 years 9 months ago

Of all your poems so far

Have to say this is one of my favourites! Watch the spacing on line 7, apart from that this is wonderful!

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