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Ill Be There

as the years pass your hair will start to gray.
but ill be there to hold you as time passes away.

as friends come and go one thing will stay the same.
that ill be there to love you as much as the day you took my name.

we will have problems just as all couples do.
but out love is unconditonal it will be there to see us through.

if ever you feel our love start to fade.
our love will be there to show you we have it made.

when your feeling low and your having a bad day.
ill be there with you to kiss the pain away.

i may not always say the right thing.
but ill be there to pick you the sweet flowers of spring.

when you feel that you have let me down.
ill be there to show you your wedding day gown.

ill be there to run my fingers through your hair.
ill be there to love you here,there,everywhere.

— poetguy05, Aug 20, 2007

Critiques

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TONI SEARS

18 years 9 months ago

I'll be there

Poetguy I love the message, it is a beautiful poem, even with the type O's, I still was able to read it, it is very good, it made me think about my own husband, he's seven years younger than I, and I know he'll be there forever, doing all those things you are speaking of in your poem, because of the bond that we have. keep writing tonisearsakasofabulous
Julie50

Julie50

18 years 8 months ago

Getting older

I like this poem because the author expresses his love for his wife no matter how old she gets! He'll be there! Also the way it ryhmes! It is a nice poem! Julie

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