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Sep 07, 2007
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Too Sweet
Too sweet she was,
the pickle not a dill.
Of way too many
I had had my fill—
enough to make me ill
and have to take
an after-pickle pill
(I knew the drill).
My desire for her
dropped far downhill.
But after all of that,
I love her still.
— barbsdad2003, Sep 07, 2007
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