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IKnowNoBox
Oct 20, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cheater

rusty spike nail

stopped me from falling to death

 trusty spike nail

 

rusty barb wire hammock

with points filed down

comfy barb wire hammock

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Oct 20, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

Good one

I likes it. You have the spelling Senyru off a tad there and you know it is same as haiku only different nature of content - human or funny. If I am wrong please correct me bacause there is argument over it (but not the syllables) Truly, Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 7 months ago

Fuck oath!

yes, i know exactly what you mean. cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

You are helping me

To become very good at understanding Japanese which is a good thing because it is the only "formal structured" type of poem I seem to be able to write. Thanks for that, Mark
Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

Lve It

I think it much more easy for me in this way :-)
I

IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Thanks mark

I knew there was more here I just needed the right inspiration .I went to a scrape yard.I saw a barb wire hammock...and thought of Cheater. Did you know you can make a lard candle out of the government cheese?I have a far sample of hobo tech. card board duct tape sleeping bags how about a two liter bottle materess...

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