Ashlyn's Prose (Part 3)

Sudden pain eradicates the heart Burden commends our downfall ~*~ Withdrawing pain from his eyes I find he is my own True selves are rarely found I seek to know your soul ~*~ Premonitions of truth found me there At once, joy and woe, united within myself Of our life, you will know For these days, we have seen ~*~ Enshrining this knowledge for all to see Raw and exposed, I will know freedom

— theladyblue, Nov 26, 2007

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weirdelf

18 years 6 months ago

Have just read "Ashlyn's Prose" all 3 parts

Am deeply moved, don't know if I can comment well right now but I have to say this. Have just been re-reading some of the classic English poetry from Shakespeare to Gerard Manly Hopkins and these works belong amongst them. Do not get me wrong! I never flatter on this site and often give extremely unkind criticism. These works are from the heart and very well crafted. There is perhaps some editing you could do, but only by your invitation and by private message if you prefer, cheers, Jess

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

God save the Editors!!!!

haha i am afraid i am in major need of an editing party!!! i will take your words as educated opinion rather than flattery any day of the week. thanks for your time and opinion!!! <3 Emarie

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

Either that or be known as a kook lol

and don't get me wrong at all Marie. When I brought my experieces to the web I was certainly a kook. I have never felt a hint of that here at Neo. You will not get alot of criticism from me just had one tough spot where you used the word pervert and at first I thought unexceptable only so that part had me stopped for a bit. I will send you a blog spot from my profile you might find interesting. Ashlyn's Prose was really a pleasure to read and an experience for me. Thanks, Mark http://www.neopoet.com/node/2818

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