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Beware he is comming

Beware he is comming

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In every action of cruels  and

in every thoughts of devils

He is nearing us to swallow .

In every second of this world

in every day and night

He is comming to trap the nobles

In every bit of anger and

in every drop of violence

he is rushing to destroy  "His" empire

In every violations and misleads and

in every irregular actions

he is spreding his net to arrest our lives

Beware! and call your guide

to resist from his disasters.to your soul

 

SAKTHIRAVICHANDRAN

— SAKTHEEE2007, Nov 28, 2007

Critiques

Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

i don't know Sak..

I think he's been around a long long time and I hope his counterpart can put a lid on him soon. I'm not sure I like the redundancy of "in" I really would like to see this without the redundancy. Interesting reading Sak.. Be back, Mark

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