Proximity of Words

This would be excellent material for carefully orchestrated choral speaking. It has a lilting rhythm with the intervening singletons forming a counterpoint. I always enjoy your work - and feel one can only do it justice by reading aloud. Hwyl fawr! Mike

This is excellent! Ohmigosh! You were able to wallop me as the reader with such powerful emotion that struck me right at the core, with such a limited amount of words! It is amazing how so few words can still be so powerful - keeping the writing simple and uncluttered is what made this pack such a powerful punch!! Loved it, loved it, loved it!

'Mused lips Sing Red songs Though Broken Wastelands' They touch my heart. In ink, Dabbler

like your calm flow the words like icebergs baffling my beliefs beautiful worlds evoked in colour in depth empassioned

Just one thought crossed my mind when reading this: MASTERFUL! _____________________________ To write a touching poem, you must gently stir the soul, if it brings forth tears or smiles, then the story was beautifully told. ________Janice Pearce_________

I particularly love the first and the last image. I know it´s bold, but I would like to suggest you move the lines a little, like "Pale moons bleed deep purple while chaotic rivers flow infinitely backward" Please don´t be mad at me for suggesting this, I myself have had to learn that it can make a poem even more enjoyable to the reader. (Thanks to Ronda, who told me that.) Regards, Ink Dragon

Emarie, it reads even better! Wow, I feel truly honoured that you took my advice. (And I understand about a decision like that taking some time.) Yours, ~Nina

delicately done - like the new pose