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REMEMBER

REMEMBER   We ran through the woods once, Remember, remember, We ran through the woods once, To hide.   We made a green den there, Remember, remember, We made a green den there, To bide.   We lay down on leaves there, Remember, remember, We lay down on leaves there, And sighed.   We gave our love gladly, Remember, remember, We gave our love gladly, With pride.   We promised a life’s love, Remember, remember, We promised a life’s love, And tried.   You opened that letter, then, Remember, remember, You opened that letter, then, And cried.   I was sent to the wars once, Remember, remember, But I did not return once, I died.      
— meic, Dec 04, 2007

Critiques

Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

Well this moves beautiful

until the last stanza I mean the last stanza moves beautiful too it was such a bummer to know the story ends that way but I suppose that's life. a point in the infinite circle am I

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