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Critical Revenge*

a night to remember to forget

 

Cake crafted like crap was served on

road kill look alike place mats

and the punch was served not from a

punch bowl but from a loo

poets read puns,limiricks,and roast

You just Had to have been there....

 

Deragatory multi-medium art

entertaining as well as uncomfortable

but really you had to have been there...

ugly culture was exposed artistically that night

The critiques didn't know what to write!

— IKnowNoBox, Dec 05, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

oh im afraid i have been there...*sigh*

Surely it wasn’t that bad!!! haha this was definitely clever!!! "Cake crafted like crap was served on road kill look alike place mats..." with lines like this, who wouldnt love you!!! <3 Emarie
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

LLaL

it was a crappy debut.I had a shit eating grin all night and even got shit faced or as the english say Pissed.... Oh now I am too Pun-ish myself for this cacophany....I must not run it is flat out brutal the splint in my side.....Oh Haaa I have gone mad will be back for the next gallery review. Cheers, Dabbler
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Fearlessfox

18 years 6 months ago

Witty

You are too funny and talented, too!! I'm at my wits end! :) Ffox
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Thank you Fearless

Perhaps to laugh at the oddest things will help us except the unexpected with heart. Gross without gratuity. In ink, Dabbler
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j_h08

18 years 6 months ago

A C R O S T I C S

Acrostics can be a blast have written some very harsh ones. Good capture of I am sure what you are referring to is " open mic night ". Just be glad you don't follow the stoner with the 60 page poetic love affair with pot, like I have. Cool write.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Oh yes that is in there as well

as the art gallery tomb group chill without scope. nobody says thats not art anymore...gross how cliche....I want wretching... viscral like an autopsy tear it apart to show how it died. poetry dissected art segmented culture brought out to your face...! Ken Miller a Photographer sees it well. In ink, Dabbler

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