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Part 1: Charlie

 

Charlie jumped up---to gain

a better ground view, I presume---

to perch uncertainly on the outer lip

of a back deck's plastic pot

that was meant by its designer

for rooting plants.

 

The bulbous pot had nothing in it

but weather-moistened dirt, loose sunflower

kernels in their dark charcoal-textured

shells, and thin green seedlings.

 

The delicate plants were, as

Mother Nature apparently intended,

sprouted from healthy sunflower-seed

strays that had survived haphazard searches

of hungry squirrels, sparrows, doves,

and other birds---for a duration long enough

to take root and begin to grow.

 

A fickle breeze off and on ruffled a few

of Charlie's gray neck feathers, which

contributed to his already overall mild scruffy

affect.

 

Charlie, you see, was a subadult sparrow

who could not fly, which for him made

serious problems.

 

(to be continued in Part 2)

 

— barbsdad2003, Dec 22, 2007

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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

I can't wait to read part 2

to see how this all develops. You have used some great descriptive poetry here. Best wishes Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

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