Forget You

what is wrong with you

you are getting mad for no reason

i had decided to hang out with a friend i hadnt seen in forever

and you go and get all mad

i dont always have to hang out with you...you know

and it is stupid as hell for you to be mad at me

for not wanting to hang out with you

i am not your to keep

i have a life too

and since i havent seen that friend

for over six months

yes im going to go hang out with them

and whats done is done

i have decided what I WILL DO

not what you want me to do

and if you are mad at me for that

then forget you.

— thomassbaby, Jan 11, 2008

Critiques

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 5 months ago

You have said it Now show me it

You've the beging of a great poem here but some may take this as a statment an not as a poem show me what you are feeling {What is wrong with you} maybe somthing like why are you so jelous of my friends maybe ask the question to the offender of your hurt instead of coming out and attacking him/ or her openly directly need to show your reader an image they can build on {you are getting mad for no reason}again show me your reader what it is you want me to see here his anger maybe your fuming or steaming your hard red neck throw some imagery in here I am only a beginer so don't take any thing I say to you as a hurt but as a way to expand your craft I still don't know what a stanza is yet or a end stop so when others try to help me I need to find a glossary of words about the history of poetry and poems thats why almost all my stuff is free verse for I don't know much yet [great the beginer is for soon they become a master]Donnie/ Sinbad oh welcome to the site keep writing

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