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From Ashes...To Hope

There's a girl who sits alone in her room at home....

Looking at her wrists trying to find life's bliss....

She thinks back in time..when everything was fine....

She gave him her heart...He tore it apart...

She sat there nice and still..as he took the "wheel"

Her mothers a drunk..her fathers In Jail..

"$3,000 dollars bail!!" They wailed....

She let him hold her close..only to be a joke....

He told her loved her..as he struck her....

She now looks at her wrists..watching the blood drip....

she cries out her eyes, hoping he'll die....

Her mother walks in and doesn't notice a thing, as her hand grabs that bottle of gin..

She stands there, looks at her daughter and grins....

As the memories flow back in...

There's a girl who sits alone, with no where to call "home".....

She thinks back when things where fine...Once upon a time...

He loved her all the time..everything was fine.....

Till that one day he snapped....

Her mother once loved her..till they lost her brother.....

Her father always cared.. always prepared..

Until that job scare..He didn't go anywhere......

He just sat there and stared..till one night he got her alone....

He hurt her everywhere...with out a care....

She looks at her wrist..and cries...

Asking god why she is still a live..

The phone rings, she picks up and a friend sings:

"I will never let you fall, ill stand up with you forever, ill be there for you through it all..Even if saving you sends me to heaven"....

Its the friend who stuck by her side..the one who keeps her alive

Its the friend who has stuck with her when she dealt with him.......

Its the friend who held her close..when ever she was "choked".....

There's a girl who sits in her room...Wondering what she is to do.....

Say goodbye to them.. or let it all just end......

She sits and talks to the that friend......

Cause from ashes comes hope all in the end......

— Musical Lessons, Jan 24, 2008

Critiques

Gentle Storm

Gentle Storm

18 years 4 months ago

I’m basically speechless,

I'm basically speechless, I don't know how much my opinion on this is worth...but I think that this is a really great poem and that it had a really great flow. This poem kind of reminded me of me and my best friend...we hold eachother up through everything. Another thing I liked about this was that I could sort of imagine the stuff happening as the poem went along...I could sort of see it in my head. The poem was very...powerful.
ML

Musical Lessons

18 years 4 months ago

Why Thank You...

Why thank you..it show what i've been through really..from a abusive boy friend to cutting...im glad that you like it..it show how i feel
Mark

Mark

18 years 4 months ago

Musical ... I feel this way every day

"it show I feel" You really jolt my feelings with this write. I just have one question. Is the story true or do you use it here to express those feelings? Truly, Mark
ML

Musical Lessons

18 years 4 months ago

The truth

Yes most of it is..the cutting,the boyfriend abuse..and the idea of wanting to die.. the drunk mother,and hte father in jail and missing brother.. no i've put in how i was feeling about everything..from the first time i cut . becuase of the abusive boyfriend.. and the day i was raped..and then finally one night i woke up at 2:00 crying so i, wrote this.. so to be honest mark its a mix of true and a expression of feelings..
P

purplemoondoll

18 years 4 months ago

Thank you for allowing us to

Thank you for allowing us to journey though your experiences. I think writing this is an incredibly healthy way to deal with those emotions and to do it in such a beautiful poem is a credit to you. I really enjoyed reading this. It may have touched some very painful images and emotions but you have done it well. Brave and honest writing. The form and structure work for such an emotive piece and the flow was excellent. I really look forward to seeing more of your work. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
ML

Musical Lessons

18 years 4 months ago

Smile on the outside...

you know that is true that it is hard to smile on the outside when u hurt on the inside but... but writeing this poem made it a bit easier to cope with
ML

Musical Lessons

18 years 4 months ago

Smile on the outside...

you know that is true that it is hard to smile on the outside when u hurt on the inside but... but writeing this poem made it a bit easier to cope with

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