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frangipangi
Jan 28, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

THE BOYS

Little feet bang, bang, banging Puffs of dust kicking Little herds stampeding Tiny breaths panting Giggles and sweat Joys and toys Here come the boys!   Little feet bang, bang, banging Fat, sticky fingers splashing mischief Pulling flowers Chase’n the cat Challenge the bird Stretch my nerve!   Falling dizzily On the lawn Play all gone AT LAST Play all gone
— frangipangi, Jan 28, 2008
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meic

18 years 4 months ago

You’ve managed to evoke a

You've managed to evoke a sharp, clear memory with commendably few words and no undue sentimentality. Nicely written. Iechyd da [Good Health - Welsh] Mike
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purplemoondoll

17 years 12 months ago

Yes I liked this - you

Yes I liked this - you captured the theme beautifully with the sharp rhythm and flow. You 'took me there' - very well done. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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frangipangi

17 years 11 months ago

kids!

Hi Jess, I know you are the coolest uncle those nephews and nieces could ever have. Spoil'em rotten and give 'em back, lol, what fun! Yours always, Fran

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