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Jun 29, 2011
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Spector
Spector of lost dreams rises
as she gazes at the stars in mute prayer
Virginal innocence undone
Begat from the loins of hades
Cursed, to roam this unholy earth
Soul seeker is given birth
Innocent child tainted blood
Coursing through his veins,
Murderous creature undone.
Metamorphosis into adulthood
On the cusp,
Innocence receding.
Lust broiling uncontained,
breeding the monster,
destined to be undone.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
14 years ago
Another...
good one! Only crit. here is I would leave off the ess on [rises]. Love ya, ~ Gee
lou
14 years ago
Gee
Thanks
Love lou
Kailashana2
14 years ago
Brrrrr. ~A
Brrrrr.
~A
lou
14 years ago
Anna
Another odd crit, what do you mean ?
Lou
lou
14 years ago
Chrys
Thank you very much, it is based on a character from a book I'm writing.
Lou
lou
14 years ago
Chrys
Thank you very much.
Lou