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lou

Spector

Spector of lost dreams rises
as she gazes at the stars in mute prayer
Virginal innocence undone

Begat from the loins of hades
Cursed, to roam this unholy earth
Soul seeker is given birth

Innocent child tainted blood
Coursing through his veins,
Murderous creature undone.

Metamorphosis into adulthood
On the cusp,
Innocence receding.

Lust broiling uncontained,
breeding the monster,
destined to be undone.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

14 years ago

Another...

good one! Only crit. here is I would leave off the ess on [rises]. Love ya, ~ Gee

lou

lou

14 years ago

Gee

Thanks

Love lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

Anna

Another odd crit, what do you mean ?

Lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

Chrys

Thank you very much, it is based on a character from a book I'm writing.

Lou

lou

lou

14 years ago

Chrys

Thank you very much.

Lou