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What is this?

What happened?

Have I became happy?

Do you know what this is?

I'm so bewildered!

Strange things flow through me

Thoughts of you and I

What have I become?

What is this?

This has become a reality

Submerged under emotions

Smile not so normal for me

Up way to late with thoughts of you

Wicked emotions leave my carcass

My hate has left me standing

What is to fill me now?

What does this mean?

Run your fingers over my brain

Touch my soul with your ruff hands

Squeeze my bones with your gentle touch

Taste me inside and out

Stamp your claim on my heart

Hold my head under water

Breathe your life back into me

Wrap me in your limbs

Lay me to rest within your heart

Time will tell if your true-life

Leave me undisturbed in my cocoon

Break me loose with acts of love

Till that day I lay and rest

Unbothered and untouched

For you I love

For you I wait

Set me free and I'll be yours

 

— RandomThoughts, Feb 19, 2008

Critiques

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Fuss22

18 years 3 months ago

This is so amazing=) You

This is so amazing=) You just wait and you will see, I will not leave your heart to bleed. Mwa! I love this poem! N I Love you!! wow
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rwc88...

18 years 3 months ago

what is this

"smile not so normal for me" - the gutted heart speaks. very good ending. where you'll go to lie you are lying at now. good logistical process leading to hoped for deliverance. this is more than recognition of a pondering self, but a loud scream to whomever you hear calling you to scratch your head. love and therapy. like milk and crumbled cornbread - food for heart and head. "up way to late..." is that "way to late" or way "too" late as beyond normalcy? wondering. my editor tells me constantly i can't edit myself - will always miss something. regardless, your line can work in either direction sent to reader. peace, wheel...
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Tragic_Bliss

18 years 3 months ago

hero

i really liked the poem and it will be something ill seek inspiration from lol really really liked it.
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RandomThoughts

18 years 3 months ago

Thankx

Hey your right is was suppose to be too oh well my bad good call. I'm so glad to hear people liked it. I was meant for my baby brian "fuss22" lol But thankx to all who read and are reading!

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