Struggle

Life is short, Life is fast

Life comes, Mine will pass

I feel no love and so much pain.

Want to end it before I go insane.

No one to blame.

I just can't do it.

My life it feels like i blew it.

Pity, pain and no love.

Feel no help, not even from above.

I'm ready to die.

No need to cry.

It's just another thing.

My death will go bye.

So you shall remember the one with no love,

The one who died with a loud thud.

(i'm not suicidle i love my life just wrote it cuz i had a dark mood from the music i was listening to)

— Tragic_Bliss, Feb 20, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: Idaho

Critiques

poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

I surely hope

I surely hope you do not mean these words One so young and has not really given life a chance should not want to end it . It may not seem it now but nothing absolutely nothing is worth taking ones life or even wanting to die. No one said life was easy but you know as hard as it gets I still like living You must love yourself in order to be loved may sound corny to you but think about it you'll find it makes sense you have written from the heart and for that you deserve credit BTW tour title did you want to say struggle? Chrys

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Struggle

I had to laugh a little at your explanation because my son writes poetry that reflects this same tone. I know full well that he isn't suicidal, and I listen to a lot of his music. When I read this I thought that it sounded like something he would write. ~ Ronda

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