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Marshall lake

As I saw you and I saw that smile,

It seemed like I knew u for more than awhile.

Whether you saw me as a friend or was hattin on me,

I thought you were beautiful such a sight to see.

Those brief moments of silence,

I didn't care as long as you were with me.

I could have stood in the water with you all day, to bad your parents said you could not stay.

 I may see really into you and I barely know you but I'm single what can I say,

I'll see you soon, hopefully once again in the same spot, maybe one day will be more than friends.

 

— Tragic_Bliss, Feb 22, 2008

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Country/Region: Idaho

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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

hattin(?) could have not

hattin(?) could have not could of abbreviations and shift key please Clean this one up and it is a sweet poem about new interests Chrys
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Marshall Lake

This one does need some work. It calls for punctuation and the completion of words without abbreviations. To leave it as is would be appealing to a very small body of readers, which would be a shame. ~ Ronda

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