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love is something i used to feel

as you stared at me,

i hope now u are happy,

seeing how i treated u i feel so crappy,

girls come, girls go,

if i will love again i will never know,

soft kisses,

warm hugs,

i give all my love,

and im still labled as a THUG

— Tragic_Bliss, Feb 22, 2008

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Country/Region: Idaho

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poewriter58

18 years 3 months ago

Errors

Other then the errors which I will list this is a nice bit of writing use your upper case I common mistake and that is just a typo Please do not use abbreviations this is a poem not a text message u=you just two more letters Chrys

asiajy

18 years 3 months ago

This poem really stuck with

This poem really stuck with me. It reminds me of my brother and my ex and how they are misjudged. They're both great people and I really feel what your saying.

RSScheerer

18 years 3 months ago

Labled

In most cases, I would argue the use of "text speak," i.e. using "u" for "you," but it works for you here. It works because of the implied tone and the matching diction. I won't argue the use of capitalization here because I often break all the rules there, too. As long as it's consistent within a piece, as it is here, I have no problem with it. ~ Ronda

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