Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Not about you

I write of that
which comes to mind.

Sometimes it's fiction
most of the time
the story's mine.

I write about good times
but usually the bad.

I submit them here
where those with eyes
peer into my life.

I speak of days past
releasing my inner self.

The last  few months
I have been quite sad
missing my dad.

Some of my poems
touch on those times.

while others, take me away.

Now I know all my work
is not very good, pheraps neither am I.

For every hundred days
there may be one that I smile
I'll write it here.

Then Neopoet will know
I still get off the floor.

So those that I know
as you read my poems
do not question me.

So you think about her?
or is it about me?

Before you open your mouth
and attack with your words
my release, my therapy.

This place that I hide
to get things off my mind.

It's not about you, it's for me.


— DarkinAZ, Feb 26, 2008

Critiques

Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 3 months ago

True enough...

May I suggest selcting the serverity of feedback option when submitting your work; I got in the habit of only using the "I want the raw truth..." button, not always the case; sometimes even thick skinned as I am I to can be sensitive; as you stated writing can be therapy; it is for me; so we are bound to take offese sometimes, but this site is also meant to be a poetry workshop where serious poets can come to improve; it has helped me in both ways Keep writing
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 3 months ago

Darkinaz...

You may want to re-read what I wrote; depending on your topic material you may want to choose a less severe option, moderate critizism or none at all; alot of your poems seem to deal with your loss; so you might be more reactive to "the raw truth," I would encourage you to try and expand your topics, its not always easy; this was my first attempt at breaking out of sad; lost love; or unfullfilled dreams ridden poems; it can also help to try an break out of the mental cycle of anguish http://www.neopoet.com/node/3005
D

DarkinAZ

18 years 3 months ago

I try to expand......

Then I come up with weird sh*T....I will write about life I guess and hopefully soon recovery and happiness will replace the loss. Thanks, Mark
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 3 months ago

DarkinAZ...

Don't give up; its takes practice; I'm not any better at writing about happiness than when I started; but it helps me to try and break loose mentally; So you know the four horsemen: Terror, Bewilderment, Frustration, Despair
T

Tragic_Bliss

18 years 3 months ago

liked it

i really like your writing and if you keep it up i will also $DEY KNOW$
D

DarkinAZ

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you

I think you write well also. Keep it up, Mark

Join Neopoet to leave a critique

Neopoet is a free community of poets who critique and support each other's writing.