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Streams of light

Yellow, red orange, blue, these streams of light keep moving through,

A brand new city atop a hill is where these streams of light catch all the thrill.

Casino, casino, triple x fun

Yellow, red, orange, blue, green, and some other colors too.

Streams of light thrive in this new city.

To tourists the streams of light are so pretty,

But to locals the city is dirty and gritty.

Without these streams of light, there would be no fun.

For streams of light catch everyone.

— Tragic_Bliss, Feb 26, 2008

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Country/Region: Idaho

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themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi Tragic...

Another good write from you...maybe the flow is off a little, I don't know how important that is to you and the project... those Neon lights do look good unless you live there.. keep writing I know ya will though...
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pinksheep

18 years 3 months ago

I like

this poem , the first three lines really grabbed me by the throat , you have a force- the poem regains its' pace once more-you also have a message i like -Please may i say i am impressed , extremely impressed that you are writing poetry at the age of seventeen- it is hard to write a poem that keeps its' flow you have almost captured this , you have a qualities i myself lack ,clarity ,pace and force -lesley with regards

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