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Electric Blue
Electric Blue
Mar 18, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Fire in the Sky

Sky of fire and gold
and in between
The darkness
of the mountains

The river of flames
flow forever onwards
towards the sunset
where they intertwine
merge into one

flames leap into infinity
out through the universe
beyond all the star systems
— Electric Blue, Mar 18, 2008

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

Fire in the Sky

This is a gorgeous piece of imagery. Nicely written, Maggie. One thing snags me; "star systems" - mostly because I'm not sure if it's a realistic term. Perhaps you meant "solar systems," or you could even use "constellations." As always, only suggestions from one poet to another. ~ Ronda
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 7 months ago

Fire in the Sky

Ronda I just love nature in all its elements. I love Earth Fire Wind Water. I love to be in all it stages ruff and smooth But when I experience these moments I am usually on my own and feel I am the only one in the universe to witness this amazing view. I am glad I painted this picture and you could travel my journey.

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