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I Find Myself

 

I Find Myself  Lying in the field, thousands of miles away from home.I find myself behind the line, were enemy roam.Light 50 at my side, M4 in my hand. Crawling through the sand.Behind the wheel of thousands of pounds of steel.Ready for the kill.One mile up in the sky, chop, chop, chop, picking up speed.Doing my countries deeds.OBA and a whole lot of ammo.In the water, in blacked out camo.Pocket full of grenades, wearing desert digi camo.Surrounded and running out of ammo.Kicking in a door, Charlie dropping to the floor.Wanting more.Pen in my hand, contract on the table.Signing my name.A soldier’s life is everyday so for all those soldiers I do pray.God be with you and bring you home,
Instead of being out there were enemy roam
— Tragic_Bliss, Mar 19, 2008

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Country/Region: Idaho

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

This poem brings very

This poem brings very disturbing images to mind. It is powerful and frightening. I like the ending which is a prayer and a silent wish. This could be just me, but I found the italics to set the poem off exceptionally well and I admire the whole presentation. I would lose the litany of: "I find myself" after the first one, I just don't find the rest necessary. Always Cat
asiajy

asiajy

18 years 2 months ago

Raw truth?

"I find myself" doesn't have to be repeated so much. The italics and centering make it aesthetically pleasing and images immediately popped into my head while reading, but seeing "I find myself" so much kind of threw me off. The lines, though shorter, would look good without it.

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