purplemoondoll

Mar 24, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Two Paths

A preacher saysEmbrace the Lord.Jesus Christ will save youFrom the seething abyssOf eternal hell.I smile to think of hellIn all its gloryWaiting just for me. Believe in God?
I scratch my head.I cannot hear his voice.He does not comfort me,Or touch my soul,Or make me smile. I have read the bible.It’s just a story book. The preacher frowns.Eternal damnationAssured without a doubtIn his world not in mine.My gods laugh
And send him on his way
With blessings.
Two paths may collideWith symbols clashing.There is no reason
To incite discordJust because we sense our godsIn different shades and voices.

— purplemoondoll, Mar 24, 2008

Critiques

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

I like the idea of a many

I like the idea of a many fold path, because many are the different religions and spiritual walks. I happen to be a cross between Pagan and Wiccan, who believes in Karma and reincarnation. I guess I'm mostly a spiritual mutt. I love your poem and think it is eloquent and self-explanitory! Always, Cat

asiajy

18 years 2 months ago

Great read

I personally like "Two Paths" better, but that's just me.

barbsdad2003

18 years 2 months ago

Questions

Symbols? Cymbals? Not sure which you mean here. Methinks either one would work, but they hold different meanings. Regards, Chuckles

purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

Symbols

Hi Chuck - definitely symbols. I hoped to make a play on the word cymbal/symbols to illustrate the (imho unnecessary) clash that sometimes goes on between different faiths or even sometimes the same faith with different factions/viewpoints - hence symbols clashing. lol I hope that made sense my friend! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

barbsdad2003

18 years 2 months ago

Makes ...

perfect sense to me. I was just checkin' to see if perhaps your intent was cymbals rather than to play on the word---while you brought additional meaning implicit in symbols. "Clashing cymbals" is such a common expression, but one I'm convinced comes up misspelled by way too many folks, esp. those brought/caught up in the current (U.S.) formal education stew/soup/hash. There're also words like rapt/wrapped/rapped, its/it's, and so forth ad nauseum. Sad to say, it's an endless subject for lament over beer (something I never drink, by the way; although perhaps I should). Yours, Chuck PS: Just came across a (perhaps pertinent) quote: "The Universe is but one vast Symbol of God." ---Thomas Carlyle

purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

Thanks Chuck - thats a

Thanks Chuck - thats a brilliant quote. I couldn' t agree more with your comments about language. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

And here’s a non alcoholic

And here's a non alcoholic beer from me. Cheers! :-) After a lot of deliberation I think the title Two Paths is better. Thanks for reading everyone! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Mark

18 years 2 months ago

middle men

or go betweens, it seems they are just in it for their own gain and they gain the most - money lol Great work Kaz, a perfect statement . . . nice poetry :)

Marius Surleac

18 years 1 month ago

truth...

I think that the text explains the way how we can get in communion with God. There is an infinite number of pathways which differs for each individual in this whole world, but you've pointed two pathways because you can chose to welcome God in your soul or you can leave him alone and chose another path. This is my opinion! Beautiful text with sharp images reflecting the inner side of ourselves… Great poem! Cheers from Marius!

purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks Marius for your sharp

Thanks Marius for your sharp insight and feedback :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Rett

18 years ago

Kaz

Ahhh, this is good. I like that. One thing I learned in life is to no knock anyones belief and to not make assumptions w/o finding out a little about it. We do seem to have similar viewpoints on this. Being a PK (preachers kid) I learned early on to question. although how I believe is private, I have a saying. Isn't it amazing that mankind never has a God that isn't a spoiled brat? Rett

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