Achilles Heel

If only his Mum had just dropped him in the Styx and given him his first swimming lesson he would have been invincible and we would have been scratching around for another symbol of a fatal vulnerability...another one of those "what ifs". This is an interesting little cameo from you Lacy that undoubtedly has more at its root than you are letting on. There is just one line that does not flow quite as well as the others in the first verse. The original is nine syllables whereas ten usually feels more comfortable. However it is beginning the line with "intense" that halts the flow in its tracks a little. So how about: "their pain intense and hidden behind lies" as ever, Proff

the interesting thing is that like skin that can develop a callous by doing the same thing over and over again; so can your insides, they toughen up over time if you expose them. However the complete opposite is most common; for me at least, never let anyone in; and when you do its frightingly raw. Good topic Frost

I can so relate to this poem. Great expression of emotion in so few lines. I like you more recent work! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.