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themoonman

Apr 13, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Purple Prisms

Keeping the wind from my candle,
turned my back on the dance...
just now learning to appreciate
the purple prisms of chance.

The luck of surviving
countless mistakes from youth...
or my simply just being here,
for my chance dance with you.

The prisms.. they surround us,
I enter them with care.
The purple light unfolds me,
I've become so aware.

The light brings up my guard
but it catches us alone..
Still, we're who we are
and the chances that we've known.

I'm waiting for the next one,
I'm looking for the light,
and when that prism claims me...
I'll cherish it for life.

— themoonman, Apr 13, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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18 years 2 months ago

How

Moonman did you come up with a clear cut and considered and beautiful line as your first one in this poem ,I congratulate you-pinksheep

18 years 2 months ago

Thank you ..

pink.. well I don't know.. this is one of the few poems that fell on the page for me.. all at once.. I have changed very little since that first night writing this one..thank you for reading and leaving such a wonderful comment.. Richard

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muttering_madwoman

18 years 2 months ago

optimistic

a real sense of hope, exploration, a new turn in the unseen future, and a sit back and enjoy the ride feel. this is excellent. favorite line: "The light brings up my guard but it catches us alone.. Still, we’re who we are and the chances that we’ve known." Niki

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Niki..

thank you for reading and commenting..I have been truly charmed by your poetic eye.. thank you Richard

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purplemoondoll

18 years 2 months ago

Purple prisms - excellent

Purple prisms - excellent expression but then everything purple is cool for me. You captured the essence of my favourite colour perfectly. This has great rhythm, flow and rhyme - I enjoyed this immensely and I loved these lines:- Keeping the wind from my candle, turned my back on the dance… just now learning to appreciate the purple prisms of chance. Thank you. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Kaz..

thank you.. my oldest daughter(she is 30)loves the colour purple. and it looks good on her as well.. thank you for your comments. Richard

18 years 2 months ago

Can't think of a thing

ooops I thought of someting - Awesome man ! And thank you ! ha 2 things :) Mark

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Mark..

thank you for visiting my poem and commenting.. it means a great deal to me.. thanx.. Richard

18 years 2 months ago

I could have sworn I left a

I could have sworn I left a comment here! I love the first line, it is a real soul grabber. The message is great and the title is very creative. What I read into this poem, correct em if I am wrong, is that inpast experiences you have learned from your mistakes and now you have learned to pick your battles as well as your oppertunities. This poem reminds me of an old Jim Croce song titled AGE. If you are interested in the lyrics, they may be found here: http://www.utterlyrics.com/j/jim-croce/lyrics/age.html Always, Cat

18 years 2 months ago

There you go..

reading between my lines so well.. Jim is one of my original favorite writers... so much so that I had to go to the address you provided to make sure I hadn't written his lines...whew.. you had me worried.. now..to have my poem in the same sentence as Jim..well I thank you for that.. I think he wrote some great songs...thank you so much Cat...your friend for life now....lol Richard

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18 years 2 months ago

I Know now

What to say as sometimes I am stuck for words-this poem has vibrancy-regards pink

18 years 2 months ago

vibrancy...

wow pink...now that is a good word... thanks again.. Richard

18 years 2 months ago

Prisms!

One my very favorite objects in life !My favorite movie, PollyAnna, and the prisms made an impact on my life! Loved your poem my friend!

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Janice..

thank you for stopping by and taking time to comment, glad you liked it... Richard

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18 years 2 months ago

This Was...

...absolutely stunning.I can't tell you my favorite lines because they are all great, if this fell from your hands to the page without thought ,this is something indeed.Great imagery and flow,I can't say enough good things about this poem.Bravo!MoonMan. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Lacy...

thank you for your uplifting comments on this short piece of mine... made my day... Richard

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

one last word

Time Richard croce is one of my favorites I just learned how to play And the grass will pay no mind this is a great right I would just ease up a tiny bit on the word chance you are flying on your own Richard you have learned well keep that work up and thank you for being such an easy person to work wor Be well Chrys

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Chrys...

You play... great hobby... thank you for commenting... Richard

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DarkinAZ

18 years 2 months ago

Great job...

I mean it must be! With all who have said so here, I am glad to just post with you all. Your friend, Mark

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks..

for stopping and reading.. I feel the same way about being on this site... Richard

18 years 1 month ago

Richard...

Interesting methphor; you can look through a prism over and over again never seeing the same angle twice; twisted perceptions of chance. Nice write Frost

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Frost..

thanks man... life is all about our twisted chances... Richard

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Amaranthine

18 years 1 month ago

Prisms

I envisioned purple lights cast like water reflections on the walls of dance hall, this was quiet and hazy, brimming with an undercurrent of nervousness or sense of it anyway - unsure steps walking into the unknown - curious, excited, and alive. I like the feelings you evoke in this and feel you did a wonderful job with meter and rhyme.

18 years 1 month ago

thank you Amaranthine..

I've been reading your comments on other poems.. thank you for your kind words on this little write of mine.. and welcome to the site.. Richard

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orgami

18 years 1 month ago

step into nu wavelenghts

a beautiful poem Moonman stunning O

18 years 1 month ago

thanks O..

for stopping in and commenting.. most of all I'm glad you liked it.. Richard

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Richard

I just had to read this one again a fine bit of writing here Chrys

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18 years 1 month ago

The

Comments on this poem are tremendous-they have helped me think even more in depth about your work, Moon you have done very well ie. Prism Moon this is an interesting concept to bring to a poem , it shows you have been thinking seriously ,how much I like this I can not say , you are bieng mathematical and this is good thing ,a very good thing-pinksheep and with deepest regards

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poewriter58

17 years 5 months ago

Richard

This has to be my favorite poem of yours It was a pleasure to read this once again the title is perfect Your last stanza has a special meaning for me now Chrys

17 years 5 months ago

Hi Chrys...

I am glad you commented, because I was reading this one the other day and realized that your original comment suggested I overused the word "chance"... and you were right! This version is slightly changed to help eliminate some of the repetitiveness in the original... The last stanza... did you find you some purple light? thanks Richard

ID

17 years 5 months ago

Richard

honestly, one of your best writes. There is so much of your personality in it. As it happens, I´m stumbling on one of Kaz´s comments yet again. I wanted to point out those very lines as my favourite ones... Hugs, ~N

17 years 5 months ago

Thank you Ink...

I feel fortunate that Kaz was here to make me feel welcomed... she left comments on many of my poems... I appreciate your thoughts my poetic friend... a hug right back at ya... Richard

Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 5 months ago

mr. moonman,

funny, I was just asking myself when you were finally going to post something again and here this was in the stream! I am so glad that you updated this piece. who knows when I would have gotten around to reading it otherwise... I have to agree with our dear dragon friend, this is one of your best and I love the rhyming. now I feel that I must read more of your older treasures, Richard, when I find the time. your Proprietress

17 years 5 months ago

Proprietress...

you are a gem and I am glad to know you... thanks, I will be posting something new soon... Richard

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W.C.Wampler

17 years 5 months ago

Purple Prisms in stream

Moon,.Your work is always good. I too am glad that some of people's older writing is here now. I see I've missed much quality work. wcw

17 years 5 months ago

W.C.

I appreciate your reading and commenting... and sooooo glad you liked it! Richard

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orgami

17 years 5 months ago

Devotchka

"how this will end" song from somewhere on the net From way back there to now I fit your poem with that haunted peice songs stir in the air like refracted light Mr Moonman you are an amazing poet never ceasing to impress and amaze me You have always been here to help me with my fledgling years till now growing close to some here You are one of them this poem is amazing sir!! My applause I hope you can hear

17 years 5 months ago

O...

you leave me speechless... thank you! Richard

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leonard daranjo

17 years 5 months ago

Purple Prisms - Amazing title

Quite unlike anything you have written before. Beautiful poem; moves with great charm and ease - encircling within its coils, images rising from a subconscious mind. I absolutely love it ... Leonard

17 years 5 months ago

Leonard...

yes it is a bit different... a little on the sweet side, but I have a sweet side, although it is my shorter side...lol thanks Richard

Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

I don't know how I missed this the first time around

This is a lovely writen poem, after sevral reads and reading your responses to the coments, it is very endearing, I pitcure you exlpaining this to a small little girl coming of age and expressing your love for her mother while dancing maybe at her wedding or at yours, and then recalling the feeling, braving another chance to dance Lovly poem great work Richard Donnie/Sinbad p. s. Purple and orange are my favorite colors but I like looking at all the colors they seem to all have some purpose

17 years 5 months ago

Sinbad...

I just love the picture you received from my write... thanks for telling me... Richard

17 years 5 months ago

Romance...

it is a good thing.... thanks Janice... Richard

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