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Tears and Hope

 There were only a few months left he could see his beloved Elaine
and he was in a desperate, frantic state of deep, deep pain…
She would leave for a far, far away land
 and there would be no way he could reach out and hold her hand.
Now, a new problem had come before them in vain
his wife didn't’t want him to see Elaine ever again…
He was in the deepest state of solemn sorrow now,
he didn't’t know what tomorrow would bring somehow
but he trusted his dearly beloved Elaine and believed in her greatly.
Somehow they would together hold hands and resolve the situation plainly.
They believed so much in each other, they would work things out effortlessly,
they loved each other ever so much they would stay together forever, endlessly.
That was the promise they had given each other with all their belief
never, ever to be betrayed come any joy or any grief.
No force on earth would ever set them apart, never
their hearts would be close together forever... 
The secret veil of fate acted silently
it moved and changed matters swiftly
they met again, and again in blissfulness
their hearts met, their minds met in happiness. 

— dsaranti, Apr 15, 2008

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

18 years 1 month ago

Hello

The poem seems incomplete, unresolved. I, for one would like to know if they kept their vow to each other. I feel the word "and is unnecessary in these two lines: "and he was in a desperate, frantic state of deep, deep pain…" "and there would be no way he could reach out and hold her hand." The poem held my interest all the way through. Always, Cat

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