Aesthetics

I study your beauty from afar
To look upun your lovely face makes me all aflutter
I never knew you could have this affect
To boil my blood and make my body afire
There must be some kind of spell afoot
But then what harm can beauty afflict
I would approach you but I am too afraid
So I study your beauty afresh
But I am still afar.

— Calliope, Apr 17, 2008

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Region, Country: New York, USA

Critiques

professor

18 years 1 month ago

Beauty crosses all divides

This aesthetic appreciation does not sound very Platonic Lacy. lol. There is clearly magic igniting you and the fear will be overcome I'm sure. I think you might perhaps consider replacing "afflict" with "inflict". Loved your study. Keith

Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Proff

The definition of afflict is to cause suffering or pain ,pretty much the same thing ,but if I changed it to inflict the project would be lost.Every end word in each line starts with af.Did anybody notice?That was the effect I was trying for. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

professor

18 years 1 month ago

oops

sorry, my affluent, affront, affected an affable, affliction, afforded by my lack of after care. lol Keith

purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

There must be some kind of

There must be some kind of spell afoot But then what harm can beauty afflict I would approach you but I am too afraid These lines pretty much say it all. I am sure many can relate to this. Watch the second line upun shoud read upon. Apart from that this was a smooth read. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

I just love it

Smiles:) Barbara I love the theme and imagery here. With a few changes in wording it will flow great. Enjoyed from begin to end. love afar is all there is sometimes.

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