Suicide

every bone in you
aches
every beat of your heart
hurts
you can’t go
on

As you take the knife and slit your wrists
I scream

every pain of yours
is a pain of mine
every dream of yours
is a dream of mine
every cut on you
is a cut on me

every bone in you
aches
every beat of your heart
hurts
you can’t go
on

As you take the rope and wrap it tight
I weep

my friend, my friend
you’re far too young
to make your life end

every bone in you
aches
every beat of your heart
hurts
you can’t go
on

As you breath your last and die
so do I.

— Gentle Storm, Apr 18, 2008

About the Author

Country/Region: Michigan/USA

Critiques

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

suicide beautiful song

Smiles:) Barbara every bone in you aches every beat of your heart hurts you can’t go on As you take the knife and slit your wrists I scream Depression is a sad disease many suffer with, hope she feels better. put to music. I hear melodies in my head. she should love it. I not doing well, so hope I have it right.

RSScheerer

18 years 1 month ago

A painful connection

The bond of friendship creates a unique brand of empathy. I'm sorry that your friend is suffering within the throes of depression and that you are caught by the miles that separate you. You have expressed yourself well. I hope that this works out for the best. If you are seriously worried about your friend carrying out this act, there is something you can do. Tell someone. It may seem like betrayal of your friendship, but you could be saving your friend's life. Ronda I love your picture. That's a wonderful series of books.

Calliope

18 years 1 month ago

I wish all the best

...for your friend and hope she feels better soon.Your poem was a great expression of your love and concern for her. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

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