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rider68
Apr 24, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Onslaught of spring

Bleak times came, dignity not spared, winterstripped away and bared, left subdued, contented,retracted by the awakening of Eostre, with calmand life restored, bare laden paths gave colouronce more, snowdrops subdued succumbed, sleeping, 
— rider68, Apr 24, 2008

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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

peter

The poem in of itself is descriptive of winters end and springs beginning But ( just a little however now) Onslaught , something about using that word with spring I would think of winter as a brutal onslaught , or the summers heat as an onslaught but spring is more of an awakening or revival or better still a rebirth something calm and soothing but then that is just one opinion Chrys
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rider68

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Chrys

The points you raise, Having penned late at night and posting, I suppose tiednes it seemed to sit quite well, Then reading with fresh mind, As always i hate to say your right, Frantically scouring the dictionary for any justiforcation "But"- failed, so back to the drawing board.....and will respectfully amend, Plus a new heading........, Thanks for caring and your thoughtful imput, Peter
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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

Peter

does it really pain you to say I am right lol then don't and just quietly make the changes if you should decide to do so it was my observation sorry but glad that you will take it under consideration I appreciate the explanation though not at all needed Chrys
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pinksheep

18 years 1 month ago

What can i say

except you can write -i d'ont know what Eostre is it is not in my Dictionary- I will find out i promise you-
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poewriter58

18 years 1 month ago

may I

That is also where the word Easter originates from Chrys
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rider68

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks for your comments

Who or what is Eostre, Eostre - Goddess of Spring, Rebirth, Fertility and New Beginnings, Believed to have come from the celtic times, Hope that helps, Thanks for stopping by, Very Best regards Peter

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