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When Hare Got Back at Tortoise

Left with your secret

You rough me up with hips   

Spread it on me

Led me on it

Tortoise hides

When unwant comes

While rabbit

Fucks and runs. 

 

Mourn for my disease

You snuck hemlock on lips

Threw me on you

Glue you on me

Children cry

When felt unloved

While scarred ones

Scab and cum.

 

Lost in your intrigue

You cuff me to your twist

Bring me on in

Fling me on out

Moon gives way

When up goes sun

While God stays

Deaf and dumb. 

 

— georgeianxu, Apr 25, 2008

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Lenny of Cohen

18 years 1 month ago

All round

success! I enjoyed the read, and use of imagery and rhyme! Excellent! LG
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pinksheep

18 years ago

The

use of rhyme has a superb Tour de force-this poem has edge, it is the 1 poem of yours that i like, i quite like one on elections, this one is harsh and has energy, probably because of the poems metre? and slickness of word-

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