Dogwood

I should like to emblazon a trail
to the flowering Dogwood,
make way for the sea in me,
I should like to bury this lonely night
in a glass-cased coffin,
find El Grecco painting my poem
once hidden in my bones,
I should like to point my finger
at the moon cascading silver night
gowns,

touch the sky
in unclenched hands
and so I shall pound these offending
fists
in the solid ground beneath my feet,
the only way I know how
to make peace with the earth.

Let me be intangible like your breath,
my Love, canyon-rimmed
ocean-eyed.

— Kailashana, Apr 28, 2008

Critiques

professor

18 years 1 month ago

Congratulations Anna

and this one i really enjoyed, especially its aggressive tone.......and yes even the perfect structure. lol. The last three lines are great. I would not change a thing. Keith

Rolwright

18 years 1 month ago

Excellent as Always

You do what you do and you do it well.I'm feeling caught in a spell,your wizardry of words is brilliant.If distance was not a flaw,I'd only imagine the conversations that would be possibly.Never rule out the possible cause nothing is unattainable,a walk in the sand would be grand.If it's meant it will happen if not,Let our poems keep us close and our emotions keep us even closer.Until then I'm always where you need me,not with you physically but in your vacinity. Peace

Quillsvein1

18 years 1 month ago

sweet

and congratulations on the publication! it deserves it--"in unclenched hands and so I shall pound these offending/fists/in the solid ground beneath my feet, the only way I know how/to make peace with the earth..." the restlessness and irritablity, as poe once said, of any true poet: any poet who is truly at peace wit hthis world completely cannot be a poet! and you definitely are one. a pounding creative demon reverberates behind this. wonderful!

Kailashana

18 years 1 month ago

Thank you. Finally learning

Thank you. Finally learning to use both my recognized and unrecognized anger in the most peaceful of ways...writing poetry ~A

themoonman

18 years 1 month ago

Dogwood...

just happens to be my favorite tree.. you've written well here and it deserves publishing.. strong and beautifully written.. can't say enough.. Richard

Kailashana

18 years 1 month ago

Thanks moonman…I love the

Thanks moonman...I love the form, shape dogwoods take... making use of so much negative space... sometimes just growing from nowhere at times, bending to fit in between other trees at other times. This year my two--one a pink one and the other a Japanese one have just about died from a blite over the last couple of years. ~a

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