No Word in Silence, just Light? - Beliefs

No Word in Silence, just Light? - Beliefs

Howl of despair in the oasis of thoughts
had crushed my ideas tho’ wound do still hurts
My will, thy, inspire the soul that was found
and asking for mercies from sky to the ground

The roses whose thorns invaded the flesh
and blood that enclosed vibrations in ash,
got me far beyond the stones and the trees,
far beyond the seas and glass from my knees

I step very quickly to hide from my tracks,
to find my self new – nor memory lacks,
nor wind shall not blow to my ear his wings,
nor moon shall not wear theatre’s ol’ strings

Just me in the silence to dig for myself,
to find an ol’ stone carved speechless with Help…

For the Word and the Light will open the Eye!

— Marius Surleac, May 02, 2008

About the Author

Region, Country: Romania, ROU

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 1 month ago

Dark and broody

with the essential elements of striving and hope, fine poetry. I do think at times you lose a little of the power of the language by stretching for rhyme, just my opinion cheers, Jess

Marius Surleac

18 years 1 month ago

Hi Jess!

You're perfectly right about the stretching for rhyme! I do not now if there is quite "dark" - you may say so, because is about finding answers to my thoughts about religion, my thoughts that sometimes are sank in the mist of multiple explanations when is all about finding the right pathway for a lighter soul. Thank you again. Marius

pinksheep

18 years ago

This

poem to me is sublime, when i read it it took me along a path which lead to a place where one was not disappointed to be.

Marius Surleac

18 years ago

thank you!

hi again! I am glad that you liked it and your opinion about my poem delights me. Cheers and you're always welcome!

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