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drachm
May 04, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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— drachm, May 04, 2008

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Country/Region: Texas

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Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

drachm

A simply beautiful ending line to this nicely written poem
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Amaranthine

18 years 1 month ago

To Grasp an Angel

I like the way you describe grasping the angel wishing the sun not to rise - wanting this moment - however illusion or reality to continue without end - without a mourning to follow. Sincerley, Amara
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drachm

18 years 1 month ago

Angels

Thank you Amara for your comments. You were most kind and I appreciated them. Drachm
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Beautiful poem

Smiles:) Barbara Sounds like a dream come true on a restless night of tossing and turning.
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drachm

18 years 1 month ago

Thank You

I read your Ocean poem---check out my "The Ocean" ---we have some same thoughts on the subject! Drachm
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amalzamani

18 years 1 month ago

Only one optional suggestion

I would only change “me” as the following “I grasped your body next to mine” Short yet complete, and the flow is excellent! This poem reflects pure true love coated with longing…I love it!
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drachm

18 years 1 month ago

Amalzamani

I too like the word "mine" in place of "me" but I have the problem with it rhyming with destiny. Thank you for your kind comments---they are truly appreciated. Drachm
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amalzamani

18 years 1 month ago

Thinking loudly

I grasped your body next to miny As if this was our final destiny or I grasped your body next to mine As if this was our final life’s line I know you may not like "Miny" so please check the dictionary for Miny=mine

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