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MEL
May 17, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I'd Hold You

I'd Hold You....

I'd be holding on to you, if you were mine to hold
and I'd be treating you so well,
as if you were made of gold.
My heart would always break in two,
whenever you went away,
The moon would rise, without a smile
til you came back to stay.

I'd be Loving you so much, if you were mine to love,
This gift is unconditional
and sent from up above.
Your smile..it warms me to the soul
a heartbeat strong and true,
there's so much warmth within your touch
When I lay close to you.

But you're not mine to love and hold,
the warmth within your touch turned cold
The mood did rise without a smile
You only stayed a little while.
Although your touch was strong and true
there's nothing more that I can do.

You can't make someone love you....

By Mel Inwood...©

— MEL, May 17, 2008

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MeanderS

18 years ago

touching hearts

painful acceptances of reality wid such faerie tenderness.. grt.. wishes
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

Faerie tenderness? The Eldritch can be kind and loving,

but they are alien to us, as all immortals must be. Oh no, this is is all too human. Genuine and heartfelt. Mel, I don't normally have much time for love poems, it's all been said, but am in the process of reading everything you have posted because you have the ability with words I suspect I will strike gold soon. cheers, Jess
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MeanderS

18 years ago

humans are caught between

humans are caught between faeries n animals...of corse n so we are humans..........half angel, half animal..........i bliev Me1 got that.. wat i meant her lines to be...........faerie tenderness............ wishes..an' by the way..faeries are as genuine as humans..n animals..i believ. wanna see dem...jus luk into the mirror or ur garden...anywere u wil find dem... god bless u al the best....to al mortals n immortals of men n women smiles;>>
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MEL

18 years ago

It's JUST ME

Mel Inwood I know, and respect what ure all saying...You get to this age and realise that everyone goes though the same shit in their lives, just at different times. I'm sure if we all put our personal journals and diaries into a big pile, like a free for all to read, it would be like reading our own lives...just in different places (weird). We all hurt, we all bleed, we all cry and we are ALL HUMAN. I guess we all read the same book! But when I was heartbroken and needed to get that out...that's what I wrote. And I guess to me at the time, it said what I needed to feel. I like it, it relates to MY situation and was meant for that ONE person to read...and hopefully feel the emotion that I couldn't say to him. It's all good tho, not everyone WILL feel the emotion because it's all so cliched! DAMN those cliches lol. As for the above, about faeries and all that, you lost me in that whole message. ALL TOO HUMAN...lmao I guess we all are guilty of that at times...I'll try to be a little less, Jess hehehehe xx Mel
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years ago

Precicely my point.

Our humanity is all too common. Some believe in God, Allah, Jehovah or the teachings of Buddha. I have a connection with the Eldrich, no more stupid than any other belief. Read "Jane" by John Masefield, I posted it on this site way back. cheers, Jess

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